4.4 hours played
Written 12 days ago
On the plus side:
- Graphics are good and since it’s a VISUAL novel, graphics play an important part.
- From the store page, AI was not used to create this VN. In my book that's a plus.
As for the rest...
- English is abysmal. I realize the authors may not be native English speakers, but the NOVEL part of a visual novel, in my opinion, is more important than the graphic part, and this VN just doesn't get there.
- The VN is short, I completed it in 4 hours and I am not a fast reader, far from that.
- Graphics don't make a VN, they accompany it. There are lots of graphic scenes, but graphics by themselves don't create content, they accompany it. In this VN there is a new scene every few words, but the text itself is very shallow. I would have preferred more content for one same displayed scene.
- There seems to be a general idea and the story seems to progress towards a goal, albeit a bit awkwardly. There are a few rules for writing a successful story, one of them is to never leave it to chance, the hero must always find a solution and even if it seems to be a lucky win, an explanation afterwards detailing how well planned the situation was handled shows it was not. This story is very shallow and hangs on a few words per scene with most of the progress happening by chance. As an example, the crew member recruitment could have been rich short story but unfortunately revolves around two sentences after a chance encounter: "do you want to join", followed by "yes".
- The lewd scenes are awkward, not in the way they are made or the action within the scenes, but the introduction of the scenes themselves. Racy stories must not be a pretext to display the racy content, just like an action movie should not be a pretext to show action, the story must be solid for the required content to accompany it, not the other way around as it is done here.
- The VN is linear. I don't really have an issue with that, but this coupled with the lack of content and the poor writing quality leaves a bitter taste in the mouth.
- Not written anywhere on the store page, you may think this is a complete novel, well it's not. The last scene is : "To Be Continued". I can safely say that if the writing and the English quality is not improved, the sequel will stay on the shelves!